Lovely! 💖 I always appreciate pronoun and body customization! I also appreciate both that your scenes were all consensual and that you noted in your blurb here that they are.
I did notice one pronoun/verb disagreement, I had Lumi as a they, and when we were leaving the party:
"Bear left a little," Lumi says. They doesn't even seem to be looking, but seems very certain nonetheless."
Honestly pretty impressive that that was the only instance I caught, but then there may have been others I missed due to glorious distraction :3