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Hi, Sarah. Since I playtested your project lat time, I can tell right away that this feels more horrifying to read compared to the last time, which I think is what you are looking for, so great job on that. The description of the creature, the word choice totally help me to picture a more dark version of the story, the last one feels more like a fairy tale. How the protagonist confuses about if this  could be a dream definitely adds up more of the creepy vibe to the story.

In addition, you tell the player what is the goal of the game from the beginning and I appreciate that.Another thing I appreciate is that how you let the text screen progressively grow longer, which feels very comfortable to read. 

There aren't a lot choices for players to choose from, which you mentioned is also your goal. I personally feel ok about it and definitely take other people's opinion on this as well.

Sorry I cannot really guess what might be the end, giving the tone of the current story, I would guess Adelaide eventually stay in this dark version wonderland and it's a pretty dark ending as well.