I noticed 2 things about your pitch that could be improved that I’d like to mention:
- The first image has its upper corners rounded - but not the lower ones. It’s no big deal, but some might notice it. (same on the store page)
- I might have been on the internet for too long, but if you just look at the two images presented in this pitch it may look to a reader like the alien girl(?) was beaten up in the second image. Your store page doesn’t have that (potential) issue because you open up with a high resolution image of her(?) face that shows off that species’ purple scales in greater detail. I’m usually against pitches where users have to scroll, but in this case I would suggest opening up with the same image at the very top of your pitch. I wish your game the best.