So far this is really excellent! I really love the world you've created, I could really see it in my imagination. The focus on both familial love and action really evoked the Hercules story for me, great job on that! I think it might have been easier to read if you cut the pages so there were more, shorter pages. Overall, great job, I had a ton of fun reading this -- I caught myself cheering on Hercules during all the action scenes!! I can't wait to see how you finish this!