I guess I personally would love to help clean up the dialogue! While I understand what's going on, the English is a little awkward and could be made clearer with a few tweaks, I think :) I have no idea what the process would be for such a thing, but I'd easily do it voluntarily to support the project.
Great job on the original music, by the way! I'm not too far in but I'm really enjoying the short chill loop of "Yesterday's Hope About Tomorrow".