Thoughts recorded during my playthrough
+ = I liked it
- = I didn't like it
* = Comment/neutral
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+ Nice quick intro
- What is with these faces? The style is kinda rubbing me wrong.
- It's not always clear who is talking. I don't know which name belongs to which character since 2 are presented on screen at the same time.
- In the first scene, it's hard to tell where the characters are supposed to be. It looks like a train? But then there's something about "messing with a crime scene?" They were talking about a wumpus appearing, but I can't tell if they are visiting the aftermath of a wumpus attack or simply chatting about it in some remote location.
* OK, when the background changed it seems like we're supposed to be in an apartment that was attacked by a wumpus.
+ OK that transformation line, followed by the reasoning, is legitimately funny.
- I'm not clear about what these other characters have against Wanda
- The writing is all over the place. I know we're going for a silly tone here, but the jokes are just failing to land.
- I don't understand the characters' motivations or what their purposes are.
Summary
There were a few cute moments here. I noticed the jam themes were mentioned during the course of the story, but the story itself is so weak that it doesn't hold together well. I think I would enjoy the story more if the characters' purposes and motivations were more clearly defined from the start, rather than revealed over time.