Hey!
I just found about this visual novel demo, and I have to say it's amazing. Art is very good. Especially the music! Love the music! Small things I'd like to report, however, are... just itsy bitsy things I happened to notice. And yes, I DO know this is a demo, and that the game isn't done yet, but I'm just going to say this. Minor stuff to consider. First is, what I noticed about Vinette's posture. By posture, I mean how she's standing. At certain points, her posture looks as if she needs to pee or she's scared, while her expression denies both that she needs to take a good piss or that she's scared. Then again, this is just something that I'm reporting from a reader's perspective. It's not something too major, just that it looks unnatural. Another thing I notice is, Val's hair. The bouncer girl. Her flocks, too, look quite unnatural. Bent in strange ways, popping from here and there, looking as if she'd been electrocuted. Again, minor thing I noticed that just looks unnatural. Another thing is, fancy text. I've seen some VN devs with fancy text who haven't paid a lot attention to readability. Yes, the font is quite good, but it'd be a good addition to remember to add a choice for normal serif text on Settings in the future. Another thing, I noticed that at times when a character has a long sentence to say, the text sometimes overrides the border. This could be "fixed" by enlarging the blood-themed text border by a few pixels. I hope you the best of days and I've enjoyed this demo quite a lot! \o/