It's a bit.. Jarring. There's no build up or anything, it's rough. But it is fun. Though going forward, I'd definitely suggest getting a proofreader or a native English speaker to go through your dialogue and fix it all. The way it is now, the English has many grammatical errors and isn't natural at all. There's a lot of things that a native speaker just wouldn't say, or at least not the way it's written.