I adore the story, but as a writer too the writing mistakes kinda throws me out of the immersion. Do you plan on getting an editor or beta?
at this point I can't afford an editor, I had many people reach out to me since I started this visual novel to offer help, but I can never let myself inconvenience them to such extent, especially when there is so much to go through, hopefully in the future if people support my Patreon I can pay someone to help me in that regard, in the meantime I really hope it's not too distracting and my writing style doesn't break the immersion too much <3