Sorry for being so quiet on this, but Annon's right: you're doing good work here, chief!
And seriously, thank you so much for formatting it for dialogue boxes.
I'll see about adding your work to the next update, if not, the one immediately after!
Any time! I also threw in those changes Annon mentioned, hope it helps!
https://imgur.com/a/scPjs
Finally done with the 3rd transformation.
Ended up reworking on the text and tried to combine it into something a bit more akin to the previous writing, but am honestly not a good writer to really say much but tried to make it work.
