I almost didn't make it past the opening, but I'm glad I did. Beautifully drawn, but text/reading games aren't my favourite, and there wasn't any skipping. Also the page screenshots didn't give any clue about the platforming aspects.
I think just speeding up the opening would make a huge difference. I love the idea of her 2 worlds, one real, one better. A lot to build on here, looks great!