I love your work. I'm on my fifth playthru of MNF and I just started MNM. Lucy reminds me of the one that got away. She didn't have additional body parts. Just an "average" looking redhead who's personal demons made her a tragic beauty. Anyway, after 0.17 there's no real sense of drama or stakes. Part of why I, as a reader,
love Lucy is how hard the MC has to work to get her to accept herself. That was excellent work. The drama doesn't have to be huge, it could be something as simple as MC gets sick and you can work on Kira. It could be a sense of empty nest as the girls start looking into learning the things they are passionate about. It could be the stress of needing to ready the house for several children being born in rapid succession. You could even play with the idea of hiring a nanny or two. It could be one of the girls having complications during the pregnancy and needing to be monitored. You did say Mary had a hard time with Maddie. There are multiple story threads which are established already. And I feel you can continue to do wonderful things with this creation you shared with the world.