Ah! I'm so happy this was uploaded! I've been following the tumblr for the past few days now!
It's a bit short for me to give proper feedback, but having something to play was nice!
I have noticed two small "maybe issues":
I believe Lorcan's name was mentionned for the first time (in the narration) before he actually told his name to the MC. Not sure anymore - I didn't recheck.
When the MC goes to see Gray, it says "and it isn’t long before you find yourself ducking under the low doorframe." - my MC is very short, so I don't know if he'd have to duck?
That aside well... I'm mostly eager to see more!