Definitely captures a dystopian legal system as well as some bureaucratic hell and a bit of body horror as well. It's very easy to picture the setting reading this.
Not sure what system this is supposed to be, you give stats for the Law and the agents of the court, so there is some system implied, but I don't know what it is. It would probably be good to mention what happens if the payers start fighting before they get to the law, I could easily see combat erupting in the magistrates room depending on the party. Similarly you never explain what happens if the group pleads innocent and plays the whole thing out. They're brought to the cell with a chance to meet the groom... but then what? at some point are they escorted down to the law to plead their case? and if so what happens then?
There's only so much you can fit in two pages and even in more space there are some things that will inevitably left to the GM's discretion. You can't plan for everything, but I always try to have a general idea of how to handle it if the party:
1. fights everything
2. avoids combat at all costs and try's to talk their way out of it
If you can answer both of those you have a good enough understanding of the situation to improvise the rest.