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Overall, I liked it and left me sad (I think I got the friendship ending). Since I replayed to try other endings and I spent time talking about it here, I guess we can say you did a very good job! 

And now, for the unpleasant part: ***Constructive criticism*** 

The face of Letti is creepy when she smiles. The art is not too good, apart from Kisabel which I really liked. His voice also is very good, but the Seer voice actor is too amateur. Also, if you could voice only 2 characters in a 3 characters story why leaving out the main character? Yes, she has 10x lines but seems not much of a good choice...

I didn't like much how many times there are walls of text to describe a cool scene with no visual clue for the player, however this brought to an impacful Kisabel reveal (the normal form) which was cool and unexpected (too bad the average player will have it spoiled by the screenshots). You should consider to add some image there, something subtle thou, like just shapes.

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I'm glad you enjoyed playing! 

Constructive criticism it's great and I agree with most of it, the lack of visual representation was because I didn't have time to do it, so that's on me!

You said "the art is not good", would you like to elaborate on why? I was the artist for this project and I'd love to know why you feel that way

Also... you mention something about screenshots? None of the four screenshots show Kisabel's true form, where did you see it? (Please edit your comment with SPOILERS at the beginning so new players know not to read it )

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Hi Sasha! I didn't realize you were the artist when I posted, otherwise I would have used another tone... sorry! 

About the screenshots, I didn't pay too much attention to the itch.io page of the game before playing, as I usually do it after I'm over with the game! I was referring to the normal form, so technically you are not spoiling anything... I just meant that based on my personal experience I wasn't expecting such a well executed (and I must say original look) for an overused concept as an angel, so I was pleasantly surprised when I saw it all at once. I just imagine that other players may enjoy it too the way I did, so you could consider to design the early phases to make this more likely? Perhaps I was just a lucky exception so don't mind me too much!

About the art, again sorry! I meant that they show signs of inexperience. There are cases when it's clear they are hasty. It's unfair to point that out on a game made for a jam, I know, but when you see Kisabel (good) and the Seer (bad) in the same screen it's almost disbelief breaking! I can't tell you in the specific "what is wrong" and "how to improve it" as I'm not a skilled artist... maybe I only have this: is it possible that the sprite of the seer is taken from a drawing on paper that is too little?

About the smiling face of Letti... yes, that smile grows contageous but maybe it's those big eyes that make it creepy? Or maybe are the separations between teeth...? Or the combination of both?

Hope I helped your professional growth with my rudeness, i'm looking forward to see more from you :)

Hey hey hey! Don't worry about it. Really, I'm not offended! The art was rush but I'm still super proud how they came out taking into consideration the time we had. 

I'm so glad you liked Kisabel's design and that you find him to be original, that makes me super happy.

About the Seer... nop? I don't know what happened, the sprite has created the same as the other ones.

About Letti's face... man, I see it now, I'll take it into consideration in the future, although I still like it in many ways :D

Thank you for the inside, I hope you get to enjoy more of my games and projects of all the other amazing people that took place in its making in the future! See-ya!!

I'm glad my criticism was taken in the right way! I'm looking forward to see more from you!  ;)