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This game looks really cute, and you're a great writer! I'm hesitant to offer this feedback, especially on a route you've finished writing, but in the early game scene where Adrian was giving the main character a free 10 minute session, I was really uncomfortable with the flirting. I think it's intended to show he's a guy who is cute to tease? But I just feel really bad about teasing -- especially sexually-toned -- somebody who is doing their job. It's the same kind of way I feel when I see someone hitting on a barista.

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Thank you for the feedback! I finish all drafts with the intention of revising them  (and will hopefully find beta readers to find moments like these), so knowing this is really helpful. I'll revise Adrian's introductory scene with your comments in mind!