Game Title/URL: Home™
Pitch/Information: Interactive fiction. You're homeless and you've got some tough decisions to make.
I'd like feedback on: Anything! Would also love recommendations of other Twine games I can play for inspiration - I've seen some really cool ones already.
P.S. Game isn't finished yet so the ending might feel a bit abrupt!
Hi there!
Not sure if I'm supposed to reply here, or where, but I played your game-in-progress. :) I like your descriptions, and the way they engage so many senses... the feeling of being cold and wet, etc, made it seem pretty realistic! I'd really like to see more choices, though. This read more like a story than feeling interactive. There were a few choices, but they seemed cosmetic (like the choice between what to eat resulting in the same response); I'm sure choices are hard to set up though, especially in only a week. Overall? I think it was a great start! :)
Edited to note, that I have no twine experience or anything. I just really enjoy interactive fiction. My favorite IF games are often by Adam Cadre, so you might check out his site or his info if you're wanting to play more. I don't think any of them are in Twine, but might be worth checking out, not sure.
Thanks so much for taking the time to play and type out this comment, I really appreciate it! Your feedback on the story is especially useful, and I'm glad you're getting the creepy vibe from HomeTM - that's what I want to develop in the rest of the game.
I really like the idea of adding pictures and sound and am definitely gonna experiment with that. Stuff like rain sounds from outside could be cool I think, and maybe some simple black and white images to illustrate the different locations. Thanks for your recommendations - the sound and images in The Temple Of No definitely add a lot, super inspiring!
Your feebback has given me tons to think about, so thanks again.
