Hello!
Thank you very much for the thoughtful review. The critique is much appreciated.
I'm glad that you stuck with the story until now and that you think the quality has been improving. I hope that this will be the case in the future as well.
As you mentioned, the project is wip, and there's a good possibility some of the earlier parts will be rewritten/fleshed out more.
Typos/programming errors are best reported in the discord server, if you are able to do so.
Again, thank you for your thoughts!