Oh my goodness it's amazing! I can't believe you hand drew so many scenes of a visual novel in such a short period of time! I know full 5 hour long visual novels with less scenes. Such wonderful work and adorable art style.
Well, I'm quite experienced with art but an amateur with writing so making the novel extra artsy is a way to compensate for that (I hope). If the novel you mentioned has a strong writing and plot, it doesn't need so much art)