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Throughout my read, I noticed a lot of "I"s(as in the pronoun) were put into use, such as:

"I came here in peace and I mean no harm to you."

In my opinion, the pronouns used in some sentences are kind of, rigid? And many of them could be simplified:

"I came here in peace, and mean no harm to you." 


or


"I slowly open my eyes into consciousness and soon, I just realised that I was..."

to 

"I slowly open my eyes into consciousness, and soon realised that I was..."


Love the VN otherwise. Have a good holiday!

PS: Those arms of the MC are kinda thicc for a "tech geek" :)

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Oh shet, how can I not think about that before?! Thank you so much for the review! (QwQ)/✨✨


Also, I kinda have the hots for muscular arms so ig that's why. (o^o)... Unfortunately, will deflate the size soon when I have time cuz I think it does look kinda big at some point. (Perhaps I went too ahead of myself when I was drawing the arms? ('ÚwÙ))

Btw, happy holiday to you too! (O3<)/