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Dude, your works are totally lit

A bit gay but still great XD. I do like how you draw the characters, the personality also fits properly (man, I could say it has the vibe of an anime series) 

I'm not seeing any other moves yet like story track shifts aside from narration but it's still quite nice to see how you make each chapter neat. 

A bit surprised by how artemi changed within three days, maybe the change was too fast? Her usual meekness is totally gone when the third day struck 

Nonetheless, I know you have reasons to why there's a personality spurt

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Being stuck with the two guys she was stuck with? It makes sense that she'd have to step up to keep them from getting themselves killed

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Extreme circumstances often have extreme results. Artemi was incredibly sheltered , full of self-doubts because being the creator was the only thing she really had going for her. Suddenly meeting two people who don't shower her with praise just for being the creator's chosen, and them appreciating Artemi for who she is would change her quite quickly. They found her lightning magic pretty awesome, whereas before, her lightning magic was a source of doubt for her (since the other chosen ones weren't tempest mages).