A lot of things happened in this story all at once. I feel like the explanation wasn't there so there could be more mystery. It works because I'm interested in the rest but, I felt like a lot of the events weren't connected and were kinda clumped together. I do like how you write the story though, it's not overly descriptive to a T and gets to the point. I like the suspense you portrayed between the main characters and I liked how you described how their magic felt. That was an interesting and good detail to add. Good job on this hope to see more of the story soon!