Thank you for the feedback. It really means a lot! The big reason it's so short is because this was a project for a digital narrative class, and I found that I could keep going, but for the sake of my deadline, I had to stop. I did extend this a bit more from the original version, but I may also rewrite it in the future since this was my first time really getting a feel for Twine. Again, thank you so much for the feedback and criticism, I totally see your points, and it means a lot that you took the time to share them with me!