Decent game so far, the English translation is pretty bad. Do you just use Google Translate for the translation? You should think about getting someone to proofread and translate it properly.
The translation wasn't that. Its mostly small errors like like using female pronouns for males. Nothing major wrong, but I mean its expected English is a second language for them. So a few mistakes is expected.
And its nothing that makes the novel unreadable, its mostly minor mistakes here and there.