I know the pregnancy issue is not implemented yet, but have you considered that you have much of the foundation for it already in place? For instance, you need a geneticist to borrow the fast track ability of the parasites from the party. Or someone could collect the plants or mushrooms from the Amazon world. And so on and so forth. I mean there's the potion from the Hero party used for guaranteed knocking someone up, too.
Just thinking that the branch choices are pretty limited. Great story, but not really anything interactive, such as being able to explore/walk around, interact, or whatnot. I mean, being able to take the aunt for a picnic on the Amazon world only for her to learn more about the native plants and animals would seem likely. Hmm... Lost my train of thought.
Anyway, I thought there would be more reader's choice by chapter 11. There's the scene where he grabs the pen to escape the lab. It's an ideal spot for an alternative storyline. I mean, what would happen if he DIDN'T grab the pen? Hmm? Or if the people he was imprisoned with had actually been randomly selected instead, each playthrough?
As for the pregnancy... It says (optional). But it isn't. Usually, this would mean checking a Y/N box at the start of the game. Here, it's mentioned, but not implemented. Really, it should be a consequence of the MCs actions. I mean if he knocked up the Asian girl right at the start, he'd really have to deal with it through the entire game - if it's a normal human pregnancy, which isn't certain - there ARE options. Alternative solutions, storylines, and such.
Really wanted to see where the virtual sisters storyline was going. But the two options just sorta stop with the ship wreck. I keep thinking: What if his real sisters found it? What if the virtual sisters escaped as androids or holograms? Weird part is doesn't he actually tell the first one that she is a program? It never seems to come back up.
Oh. And who's to say that biological modification CAN'T make the one going through gender change into a completely functional dual gender, like Ziv, or fully female, or only as they are now? (Men can get pregnant in real life now with a pseudo womb, so ...)
Err... Lot more to say. Hell, I'd probably walk step by step through the whole story with suggestions and alternative paths, but... I'd best shut up now, yes?
Great stuff! Even without the adult content! Just like the story...even when the attendant was still a starwars escapee (Twi'lik? Twi'lick? Something...)
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