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Excellent story! Love the multiple uses of reflection. The pacing is great, and the touches of humor (her braid! lol!) were well placed.

If I had to nitpick, I could only point out a few places you overlooked in editing ("can't a girl can look good") which I'm sure comes down to the time constraints involved. The ending could probably use a bit more punch, too, but again, that's a nitpick.

Great job! Loved the story.

That's great, thank you very much. That typo is so annoying! I thought I'd proofread it so thoroughly too... I definitely agree about the end, but I was right up against the wordcount limit.