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Fascinating lore here -- I love "monkey" as a descriptor for humans, and "monkey king" as their emperor. You did really well bringing that out bit by bit over the course of the story.

You might want to consider shorter sentences during action sequences. Long sentences tend to slow things down--if you keep your sentences shorter and your vocabulary simpler, the action can come through more cinematically. 

Intriguing story, though! Thanks for sharing it!