Loving the story.
There are a couple of times in the 2nd chapter where it says limp and I think it should be limb. It's in the scene at the university just after the one with Carl and Deb.
I know... unfortunately that silly mistake wasn’t caught by the spellcheck.
I have an english native speaker friend that helps me proofread the scripts in his free time, but he hasn’t yet finish the last chapter’s script, which is quite big.
So, this chapter might have more mistakes than the previous 2, like that “limp” one. Once he finishes it. I´ll post a small hotfix that corrects everything and also improves the readablility of many sentences and makes them feel more natural. He really does an awesome job on that.
Thanks for the notice, and I’m sorry for the inconvenience. I'm glad you're loving the story though :)