Alright… There is so much I have to say! First off, I would like to point out that this is my opinion and a critique of your Visual Novel. I know many developers might not like criticism to be added, but use it as a means to try to better your self in your projects and detect problems that make a project stay behind easier. Leaving that aside.
The good: Your characters, they might not be completely fully created or for now lack certain familiarity with people… (It might be personal in my case to be honest) They are good enough to bring the concept of them, yet I feel they need a little more background.
The music over all doesn’t distract or ruin the scenes so far, and to tell the truth they blend a bit too well… It doesn’t convey emotion behind it. If these songs are of your making then they do pretty well, just that there is no hint of feeling behind. Now I’m not trying to insult but, it doesn’t add to the atmosphere of the scenes sometimes.
Art design, it has its own charm I’m not going to lie it requires some rework, but it has its own charm to it. I quite like the backgrounds in the forest, they convey only what’s necessary. The characters are well detail, but there seems to be clashing inconsistencies sometimes.
The bad: Narrative wise, it’s doing good… But, there is so much left behind, some scenes could use a little more description. What I mean is that makes the reader use imagination if there is no art for it. Create the scene add the feeling of nature, create a feel that adds and makes the reader feel that he is there.
Now, I know narrative in extensive description is bad, but there is a fine balance to transport the reader and feel the story home. So far it does its purpose, but it feels that there was some hesitation.
Overall: Not a bad Visual novel, I would say that it’s a bit fast passed between interactions, is living at the moment more than a memory. IT has its own charm, but it clearly needs some work in the background.