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This one really seems to want to be more than 200 words.  That could arguably be said about any of the games here, but in this case I really feel the missed potential.  Your Blades in the Dark-style dice pool action system is crying out for greater elaboration, these character classes demand further exploration, I want to know more about this setting, etc.

That's really tough because unfortunately we have to grade what's presented and not what is merely potential.  My advice would be to find ways to cut down on some of your word sinks (maybe cut out the classes and make the powers simple guided writing exercises) and reallocate that space back into the core mechanics.

If you take this further I will be among the first onboard!

Thanks for the feedback! I actually have decided to try and expand on it, since there was a lot more I wanted to do and ran out of space :p I'll let you know when I put something together!