The fact you don't give player an option to refuse sex scenes is a big minus, I would have rather decline Marion. Few times both Marion and MC refers Susan as landlady instead of mother, which isn't bid deal, just need proofreading I guess. Also I really doubt that Kylie would open up to MC about her issues first day they meet, prob would have better to let her open up bit by bit over time while getting closer.
All in all not a bad experience, could be better but could have been a lot worse too so keep on rolling =).
Also it was bit confusing with chapter labels, this has 3 chapters since the prologue is labeled as chapter 1.