That was a short and sweet story. Nice work!
- Thinks I liked:
- Love the hand drawn art.
- I appreciate the lesson being communicated through the story.
- Never seen a text based hyperlink story before. Very unique!
- Things that could be improved:
- I would have liked to see more branching paths in the story. I think there were only 2 different choices you could take (chat vs practice & duel vs friends).
- If you are unfamiliar with valorant / LOL then many things in the story can go over your head. Phrases like "girls only play support", "you go to queue up", and talk about ranks would leave someone unfamiliar confused. Maybe find ways to say the same things but make it easier for others to understand.