The images didn't load, which made things a little hard to follow. At one point, I got the attached error (but was able to ignore it and keep going).
that aside, the story wasn't bad - I would have liked to play chess and beaten some people though!
It's a little hard to rate, considering the visual component is pretty important for a visual novel, but the story and concept seem solid enough, especially if getting the actual chess playing and your performance in said chess games can change the outcome, would be very cool.