Wow..! I'm not sure what I was expecting, but this blew me away. Your imagination is wonderful! It was a truly refreshing read and I really hope I get to see Ascendance develop into a full story. The characters are very engaging so far and I'm eager to get know them even better. I especially like Elya, though it is hard to choose between them :,)
My only slight criticism is that the use of dashes to indicate dialogue rather than speech marks was a bit jarring. Was there a reason you chose to write like that? /nm
Anyhow, I wish you well <3 (even if it turns out that you don't return to this project, you've more than convinced me to stay for any of your other creative endeavours)