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Excellent little VN with a great sense of style and a nice mysterious, suspenseful story, and fittingly moody music that's not distracting.  I also quite enjoyed navigating the patient interactions at the beginning.

In terms of gameplay, the "fast" button was kind of annoying because I clicked it by accident and blew through a good chunk of the story before I managed to stop it without any way of going back.  Ren'Py gets around this by not skipping through dialogue you haven't seen yet.

Narrative notes (avoiding spoilers as much as possible):

The revelation after you leave the hospital works as a motivation for the main character, but the reveal came out of left field for me and it didn't seem to really go anywhere afterward.  It's possible I glossed over the early hints, but if not, I think it would help if you plant the seeds in the player's mind that this reveal is coming, even if the exact details/nature of the reveal aren't made known to the player until the reveal event itself.  (That was really hard to write without spoiling anything!)

A few grammatical notes:

Just a quick nitpick, a choice at one point says "Condolence her" - this should read "Console her" because condolence is a noun, console is the verb you're looking for :)

I also noticed a typo where I think "amidst" is spelled "midst" (when you choose between rushing to the door and trying to lose him)

"What if this time Jackie won't make?" - I think "it" is missing from the end of this sentence?

"The doctor wanted to keep me in monitors over night" - This should probably say "monitor me over night" or "keep me under monitoring over night" - the way it's written sounds like the doctor is going to jam you into a gigantic monitor ;)

"inappropriate" is misspelled when you see the website warning page

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Thank you for your review! I really appreciate your grammatical notes and I'm so sorry to hear about your accident with the "fast" button!