Congrats on your first visual novel! I think you have a good sense of spookiness and atmosphere. I also liked your character art. But I think sometimes you were trying too hard to make sure I knew it was supposed to be scary (for instance, saying "The ringing tone has an eerie feel to it!"). I think it would actually be scarier if you didn't tell us so much and trusted more that we would understand when things are supposed to be scary.