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Crimson Blood Games2 years ago

After playing the game, I assume this was meant as a practice game so I will try to be helpful. 

1. Good job on voice acting. It was a bit wierd hearing it after both MC and Dragon Tamer being quiet, but I know how hard it is to get multiple voice actors, so don't read to much into that.

2. I was missing the really music trough most of the game, and if you are planning to update this project I really recommend you put more music in. There are places where you can get game music for free, so I think you can't miss with it.

3. The story can be pretty inconsistent and plain at times, so if you plan to write your own scripts in the future, try looking up some creative writing tips.

4. Also try not using different art styles within a game, that road background felt really out of place. I'm not talking about story relevant art tho. The sheep drawing fit well since it was timed with the story.

I hope this was helpful and that I see some of your work in the future.

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SeaLiteral2 years ago

Thanks! I did make this to make something with Ren’Py, to get better at writing, and to figure out how to use voice acting.

1: Thanks! I’ll show the voice actress that played Clara your comment (I’ve also shown her the other feedback we’ve got).

2: Yeah, I intended to have two more songs (with and without lyrics) but didn’t have time to write them. I think I will try to write them when I have the time.

3: Thanks for pointing that out. There were some inconsistencies that happened because I changed things in some places and forgot to change them in others (next time I’ll write a proper outline first). And I guess I should try to get better at writing, in English and in general.

4: That was an edited photograph because I was running out of time. The photograph was taken in September where there wasn’t snow, so I tried to add it into the photograph, but yeah, it didn’t quite turn out well.

I hope this was helpful and that I see some of your work in the future.

Thanks! I’m planning on participating in more jams, so I’ll take this feedback into account then. And I’ll also try to make a 1.2 version with more music and maybe some tweaks to the script, especially if I decide to make more characters sing songs.

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