Hey, I enjoyed playing this demo!
The writing style's great, I think the snarky, self-aware tone is really entertaining. And since that's the backbone of your game, I think you have a pretty solid base.
The main thing that I think can be improved is general text readability. The typing effect is cool and atmospheric, but it feels a little bit slow compared to my reading speed (might be good to add an option to change the typing speed if possible?), and choosing to display all the text at once immediately hits you with a big wall of text. Might be good to have the space button load a paragraph at a time rather than the whole page!