I'm glad to help, and I appreciate your responsiveness!
A person's smell, just like their appearance, making you stand out from the norm in a new area definitely makes sense to me. The soap felt a bit like an edge case, and I just wanted to be sensitive to the fact that someone might read this and think the implication was you could detect CYCLOPS because they were the "clean" people among the "dirty" locals. Since CYCLOPS is generally portrayed as the military industrial complex, I (in my own biased way) tend to code them as predominantly US and Western European, and with the setting being Egypt, it might end up touching on elements of colonialism.
In any case, the edits look good! I'm looking forward to trying this scenario out with my regular gaming group.