My little complaints.
-Can you allow them to have their mouth move while they are speaking, because I got really confused of which one who is who.
-Also if they do speak, please use quotation marks.
This is good though! The story line is interesting.
- I sure hope there is images between the two (Like her wrapping a bandaid over finger, or her craving an applebunny.) To make it feel more immersive and stuff!