I've just played this little demo, and I must say I really love this game. I really like games set in oceanic worlds, and unfortunately, this isn't something I come across very often. It's also nice to see how different are the main characters one from another! I like the different shapes, sizes and all that stuff.
The story seems very cool so far - got me very intrigued, and I want to know what'll happen next!
As for your questions:
--Anything unclear that you wish had been better explained or would expect to be explained as the story goes along?
Well, it seems pretty clear to me so far - of course some things are a mystery yet, but that's not unclear, simply not explained yet, like what is Riu's backstory with the Pena, since he said he wasn't involved with one "directly" and stuff like that.
--Am I too wordy? I know this is a problem I've had in the past (look, I'm even rambling now!).
I don't think so?
--Do you relate to Makani? And even if you don't relate to her, is she at least a protagonist you're willing to root for?
I don't really relate to the characters I'm playing in games, but yeah, she clearly is a protagonist I love and root for. She's really great! You know one thing I hate? When visual novel creators want to make a "strong female protagonist" at all cost, and she ends up being a cold badass capable of anything, wich is just as flat as the dense clumsy maiden. Here the protagonist is a warrior, sure, but she's well balanced and I like it.
--Got a favorite character?
Riu! He's so cool and cute in a way! I loved him since the moment I saw him!
--Would you want to play through the rest of the story?
Hell yes!
--Anything that just needs fixing?
Some minor typos and things like that, I believe. But I can't say for sure for all of them since my english isn't that good.
Overall that was a great experience, and I'll be stalking this page for future updates and new chapters!
Thank you for making such a nice game!