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Oooooookayyyyy....

first things first...

this is a test game which is obviously not real game (yet)

1. I would point out is that the game is TOOOO easy-going and really fast paced... which is some ways might be good, but this is actually too fast...

2. would be that it just repeats over and over, I would say that more locations like a room where you actually play with roxy would be better than in the middle of room with tables.

3. I think Roxy, especially her face is too much detailed, really sharp I would say, which isnt bad but making it less sharp and more "cute" would make ppl more attracted to the game... Since Humans like to look at epic,cute,beautifull looking things...

4. The text has couple mistakes, which can be easily fixed and probably obvious.

5. (that's more of an advice than a point of some bug, issue) Maybe make the game more "free-roam"  Visual Novels aren't defined by this way or another, you can get creative at any point and add something crazy...

Simple example would be to make HUD where you have money, tokens, phone where you look at roxy stats,

another would be being able to choose what do you want to do in the morning, for example go to work, fap, play games etc, you could also add day time where you have 3 stages (or more) (morning evening afternoon)

which would add a lot of options and make it so you can visit roxy at different time of day and spend it diffrently...

 6. sometimes the skip to (I go to bed) is just pretty random even for a test game... it's like I go shopping with roxy, we come back, they talk: it was fun tralalala. SKIP!!! I go to bed... I think you know what I mean

7. add more characters, even as a side character that is not really important, (also add more background and people in it as like colored blobs lol, I am not gonna make it a new point cuz this message is already too long xD)

8. Roxy gives in TOO quickly... in the first point I said the game is too fast paced... but this time I mean the relationship. you need to meet her 3 times and you can just go to bed... I would say that actually making the player try and fight for her would be much better.  for example like I said in nr 5 you could have times when you cant meet her and times when you can... also making this relationship build up is (for me at least) much better so the player can enjoy the game at the end much better, you could make happy ending as well as bad ending and some secret ending if you wish so...

9. More animations and stages of animations would be great and that's not a pointer but more of a thing you could add for people to enjoy this lil' bit longer :D

be creative as much as you can and try to make it something you would think of it "I made that and I think it's pretty damn good" take pride in it and make it however you want, I can tell you what I dont like but the most important thing is that YOU will like it! :D <3

game is simple and not bad, it certainly needs imrpovement but it isnt bad as some games can be.

hope you have fun making games, and I am waiting for the actuall game not a test :D

sorry for such long ass wall xD

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Thank you for your feedback! I will keep all of the information in mind. I will consider your suggestions.

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