I'll be keeping an eye on this one for sure.
As for feedback, the content that is there is good. I would suggest finding an alternative way to delivering that extremely long narrative at the start. Having to read several walls of text before you even know if you are going to like the game or not is a big pill to swallow.
Perhaps break it up into single paragraphs that display over a relatable background image?
... and yes, I know this would mean you would have to make those images yourself. However, this is the foundation of the story, is it not? You'll be very grateful to have something so important polished up well as it sets the tone for the whole game for those starting off in it.