The art looks gorgeous and the story sounds interesting. I want to read it but to be honest from the screenshots it looks hard to read with the coloured fonts you have chosen. I also think the nvl screen is a bit too dark so we can't see the pretty art behind it very well.
Also some of the text looks off centre like in the second last screenshot. The two sentences at the end. I realise it has a voice acting but I still think the presentation of the writing is important especially if it's going to take up most of the screen with nvl mode.
I thought I'd leave a comment to let you know so you can maybe have a chance to fix it and make it easier on the eyes to read. It looks like a lot of people put a lot of work into it so it would be sad to see it go unnoticed. Sorry if this comes across as rude. I'm not trying to be.