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To answer your edit I think the problem is I didn't give much time for the characters to really be given much of a personality. I never intended the VN to be long from the start, just wanted to make a short love story from the point of view of someone who's disabled and another who isn't.

Me adding everything else I think detracted from that and made it become something else completely or jumbled up to the point it became a mess. The only thing I could think of that might've made things a little better is if I had voice actors for the characters to express their emotions due to my writing not being the best.

Thank you though for playing the game and giving a review :) I hope to create better VNs in the future with all the feedback I've been given.

Eeuphy1 year ago

I think I’m into theses kind of setup at least, I love playing heroine, gay, and “unusual/not used much” viewpoint ; the disabled are one of them, and I really appreciate you did. The only VN I know featuring a girl in a wheelchair is “Flowers” (Erika - and it’s pretty good, I love her ! - but they didn’t play much on using facts on disabled, like the most related true life experience we get is her being helped at washing herself, and I don’t even think it’s how it’s done - the wheelchair is mostly a prop sadly).

But to me - the writing is paramount ; design, music, and everything is only a way to make the writing stand out more in the end.

But yeah, I’ll totally give it further try if you write stuff with heroines in the futures. I think no one should judge the quality of a writer on one go ; ebi-hime -for one- did write a tone of VN, half of them I hated, a third of them I cried over - almost felt like I was mislead at the end “who wrote this great… THE BAD AUTHOR I RESENT DID AAAAAAH I DON’T UNDERSTAND” :p

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