This game needs work, while the story does seem interesting the writing and poor grammar make it too hard to follow and I often find myself not understanding the dialogue as well as feeling as if things are moving too fast. I'm in no way saying that this game is bad, just that it needs to be refined. I would also highly suggest not using "tho" and "boi" in your writing as it makes you seem unprofessional and lazy. Lastly I would suggest adding transitions between pictures to make the story flow more smoothly. Overall the story does seem interesting and I do plan on playing ep. 2 when it comes out and I dearly hope you don't take offence to any of my critiques as I'm just trying to provide constructive criticism.