Okay, hm… Sorry to go out of tune from all those (deserved) ultra-positive reviews, but after having played the whole game from the beginning once again, I've some small critics to express.
Don't get me wrong here: I'm still hooked with the game. Well, even more hooked since the last plot twist. The story is more than good, you did a sumptuous work with the musics and sound effects, and the characters are very lovely. Really, I love it. But, there a few –just a few, especially regarding the current length of the game– things that bothers me a bit, so I thought it may be positive if I write them down there. That's almost only detail points that can be solved by tweaking a line or two, or maybe a single picture. Once again, it doesn't mean your game isn't awesome, that's more related to me being a quibbler. Hope you don't mind!
(And to any people reading this without having played the game yet: I insist that's just minor points, don't let them stop you to play, the rest of the game really worth it. And beware if you chose to read, there's a few spoilers)
So, let's go, more or less chronologically:
– Just after the first encounter, while hacking Orion's phone, Nova says he doesn't have any Instagram account. We just saw him creating one a few nights before to like Penelope's pics, on the same phone. So Nova should have noticed, isn't it? (Orion even mention that later just after the photoshoot).
– During the Red Herring quest, some of the times we were supposed to see Mrs. Flink with the camera flash (especially the very first one), as the pictures are really dark and my screen usually at its lower level of brightness, I just didn't even see her shape, so it was weird to have Orion speaking about something that wasn't possible for me to notice. (I insist again on the first one: even with more screen brightness, I had to take a screenshot and enhance its light to see there was actually a silhouette on the outside).
– After playing again the first bed scene with Annie (Really love the music at this point, BTW <3), I thought her pink pyjama would be added to her gallery, but it look it wasn't the case. Is this deliberate or did you forget? (Nancy's white pyjama and Dalia's night outfit are added just after, so it looks like Annie's one is missing –even if we still have the red one).
– Not sure about this one, but the Praetorian sniper at Ogygia says Dione is the weakest of the three weapons of Atlas. The only thing Idriel explicitely said about that is that Calypso is the most powerful, without sorting the other two, but as she presents Dione in second and the strongest in third position, I guessed Hyas was the weakest, so this line surprised me a bit. (The fact that a bullet can miss its target surprised me too, but I checked back, and the exact quote from Idriel started with “they say”, so it was hinted as a rumor even from her, good job here!)
– Just a little bit of thing, maybe unimportant, but which makes me wonder. Calypso looks bound to Orion specifically (she later says to Alex at the mansion that he's the only one able to summon her). But despite he volunteered to open the box, he didn't even had the time to touch it before it opens, and it's Alex who later breaks the final chains. Maybe there should've been something to specifically explain why he is the chosen one, like a picture of him putting a finger on the box just when the blue lights comes up. Or maybe rather let the other two be able to summon her as well?
– There's a line more explicitly incoherent with Maat: she says that the Bastet Figurine makes impossible to wake up before 50 or 55 minutes. Avery was already sleeping when Nova arrived, so when Orion find them, he almost certainly sleeps for more than five minutes. Yet, we see Orion waking up while the other two are still sleeping (not for long), so even if he slept the minimal 50 minutes, Avery should have been doing so more than 55, and thus have been disconnected. You probably should tweak the line by saying the figurine makes you sleep some (unspecified) amount of time but makes you wake up in time to avoid auto disconnection.
(– During the wizard contest, with the polyjuice potion, Orion has the same “first-time-like” reaction for Penny than for Luna, although he already saw her bare breasts at this point. Not a problem at all, as it's not like he was used to them, but I wanted to make an exhaustive report, so…)
– All the Gems of Doom shown by Idriel on the first talk with her were dark. The one found on the Red Herring was, too, despite the blue light coming from the box. So it's a bit weird that the one from Garrington has another colour, and it's even weirder that this colour is already shown on Orion's slides while preparing the heist. I think it's pretty cool for them to have several colours, but Idriel should've shown that, and Orion shouldn't have known which colour was the one Garrington had.
(– The letter delivery while preparing the heist was a bit dark, I had to brighten up a bit my screen to clearly see the symbol on the envelope. Not as much as for Mrs. Flink, by far (and this time it was of course visible the symbol was here, just it wasn't really readable), but as it was the second (and for now, last) time I had to do it, I'd better let you know.)
(– As I'm a bit of an astronomy nerd, so I have to ask: is there a specific reason while, having nine persons to name (not counting the Expendables, of course, although they could have been named “asteroids” :-°), you choose to use Ganymede instead of the way more known Uranus?)
– Astronomy nerd again: while stargazing with Alex, she says it's October 15th, and shortly after, she points out the Leo constellation just under Ursa Major, while Orion (the constellation, again) is visible on the picture, probably higher than on the horizon. Depends of course a bit on the latitude, but where I live, on mid-October, Orion doesn't start rising before midnight, and Leo, being the main spring constellation, is way closer to the sun and doesn't show up before about 4am, so neither of them should be visible at this time. And this comes just after she points out how the Eternum sky perfectly matches the real one, so…
Edit: just noticed this point also depends on the gap between legal and real time. Sorry, that was obvious -_- Don't know what would be the gap in Kredon, but the said constellations may show up one or two hours earlier. So maybe Orion would be visible close to the horizon at this point. But Leo surely isn't.
– To enter the party, Orion says he “sends” the money, which I don't think is an usual way to tell it for giving real dollars, so at the moment, as Judith said it was possible too, I guessed he payed in eternals. Which could be cool, but then I remembered that when hiring Noah and Raul at the Yoga class, they talked about giving the money to them at the next connection, which hinted it wasn't possible to do it outside the game, and thus makes strange the party hostess allows to pay later.
– I'm a bit disappointed about Orion just answering by “I don't know” when Regina starts saying that all Instagram girls including Penny are superficial and only caring about their look, as he perfectly know she at least isn't like that at all. (I at least hope there's still something to do about this yearbook.)
BTW, I also checked your Patreon page, and the post with the image showing your current progress is now really deep and thus hard to find (I don't see it pinned on the top of the page, probably because I don't have a Patreon account, or maybe I checked at the wrong place?) so it doesn't help to see how much work you still have to do 'til the next chapter.
…and, that's all! As said before, that's really a few points, regarding the size and the general awesomeness of the game. But as said before too, I'm a quibbler, so I hope it won't bother you to check them and tell me if you agree or not. And, to finish, please allow me to also add some wishes for the future releases :-)
Already said that on my previous comment, but it would be cool to see some more diversity in background and supportive characters. There's already some, but you still could add some more!
As I already said before too, I'm a huge fan of Eva and I hope we'll see her again. I think she would be the perfect optional character, the one you could totally miss while playing but that rocks the team and gives cool secondary quests if you do find her, like for instance Yuffie in FF7.
And, last but not least… please let us see how Annie is a real badass too. I mean, we saw Dalia kick butts several times (including Orion's one). We had Alex and Nova against the Praetorians, and Nova also had the quick but intense session at the party. We had Luna and even Penny during the tournament. And Nancy with all the empress stuff (the scene with the previous emperor makes me guess she took a bat at her work because it was safer than her bare hands to the Ulysses guy). I don't even mention Calypso (I especially liked the final lines on Ogygia).
But for Annie… we guessed on the first session on Ion that she has the same potential, but it was never clearly shown: there was no fight on that session, and she was mainly scared on the Red Herring quest and with the aliens on Andromeda (which isn't bad at all, let's be clear, it gives her depth). And during the heist, she had a pretty important role, but we just saw her opening the final box. So, please, the next time, let us watch her be a total badass and kick some butts too. She deserves it.
That's all for me. Keep telling Caribdis how his game is awesome, folks, you're better at this than me and he deserves it a lot too <3