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Here is what I found so far, I put the fix in parenthasis by the grammar/spelling oops

I Already know her, and I know where she is and she's an easy target. (already should not be capitalized)

The girl lowers the gun. She Even she doesn't seem to trust at all, but she seems to have gained trust with you. (This line is a little garbled. Did you mean to make it as "She doesn't seem to trust at all, but she seems to have gained some trust in you."?)

Line is too long: There's a certain moment of connection between the two of them, a spark, I can feel that core of magic beating in her chest, fueled by her feelings.

She has been causing trouble since she was little and always runs away from her families Unfortunately.

You ve-come!(You've come!)

Mis-gendered He's should be She's: I'm sure he would jump on me it it wasn't for the vigilance and the fact that he's wearing handcuffs.

Mis-gendered: Human warmth, something that has been alien to him(her) for a long time.

But I need to be careful.... to expant(expand) it. I need to spend that Influence.

And I need influence to recruit students and staf... (staff)

Recruiting Elsa: I didn't expect her (to be) so... Interesting. She's stylish, she's elegant.(She's stylish and elegant.)

And why would I kike(like) to do that?

Esy.(easy) Come with me. Come to my Academy. You'll be free there.

How could I say not(no) to this splendid offer.

The treasures I missold(mis-sold) have brought us to our current point.

Mis-gendered need to be female pronouns: He had work to do in his office and didn't take me a week to have everything ready.

Mis-gendered: I tried to explain to her, but there was no way.

Mmmmf, don't you dare mocking(mock) me.

Elsa's recruitment quest stays active after finishing it.