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Overbose and too wordy? Indeed. But cheap poetry? No!

Honestly, I like how the author construct those sentences. The fact that English is not the developers' main language makes the story description sounds unique. It's an achievement on its own!

Then, about what everyone complained: too wordy. In my opinion, the problem is not the wordy itself, but more into the words' smithing. 

There are some description that seems unnecessary because they have nothing to do directly with the main character. Some of them also sounds a bit off because not properly inflicts a certain mood in a certain situation.

Too much information make me forgot why and what the main character do in the place and how's the atmosphere (mood) in there.

There's ways to make sentences sound poetic without being too wordy.

Or maybe this way of storytelling is just not my cup of tea? I'm not sure.

But for sure, the developers give this VN great efforts and we must appreciate it!

Don't you agree that this is an amazing VN because of the interactive stories with interesting world-building and characters?!

Looking for the next update!

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To call this vn amazing is an offense. If anything its more of a slogfest that is painful to read and accompany

Your downvotes say otherwise.