I love the writing! It is both funny and thrilling. I think the way you weave the timer mechanic into the writing is very skillful, and a great demonstration of the value of tools like Twine for interactive fiction writting. I think the story could be longer, but I can see why you ended it here. What's really necessary to fulfill the requirements right now is at least one piece of original art. Other than that, solid stuff! It was great to play this :)